Live ngày 4/11 – Soi bài luận – bắt đúng lỗi nâng điểm VSTEP Writing Task 2 (B1, B2)

[Đoạn 1 – Lợi ích]: On the one hand, taxing private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation can bring sveral benefits. First of all, one of the most significant advantages is that it can help reduce environment polluted. For example, according to some survey, many people say that if taxing private car owners heavily, they will use bus or metro to save a lof of money (không bổ trợ cho lợi ích 1, cần đổi lại là: save a lot of money -> reduce car emission).

Câu gốc học viên: In addition, another important positive impact is that it can reduce traffic congestion and improve infrastructure. Furthermore, it can help reduce greenhouse gas emmissions and protect people’s health and wildlife habitats.

—> Giáo viên sửa lại: In addition, another important positive impact is that it can improve infrastructure. The reason is that the government will use tax as resources to build new roads, improve transportation system, and updating new traffic lights. Hence, thanks to it, people can commute easily.

[Đoạn 2 – Bất lợi]: On the other hand, taxing car owners can also have many drawbacks. One of the downsides is that it can make people feel financial pressure, which makes them stressed and anxious. [lấy ví dụ về tiền thuế của ô tô cá nhân → hệ quả: đặt gánh nặng cho người lao động] In addition/Additionally, Moreover, another downside is that it is not convenient with every one because it can not improve personal mobility. [giải thích ở VN hệ thống xe buýt không đúng giờ/ mọi người cần đợi 30 phút để đi xe buýt + kết cấu đường ở Việt Nam nhiều ngõ ngách mà xe buýt không thể vào được]. Therefore, people should have a better understanding of this issue.

Gợi ý phát triển ý: Cần đưa thêm chi tiết thực tế để hỗ trợ lập luận: tiền thuế xe tạo áp lực kinh tế trực tiếp cho người đi làm; mạng lưới xe buýt chưa đáp ứng tốt nhu cầu đi lại hàng ngày (thời gian chờ lâu, ngõ ngách sâu không vào được).

[câu chủ đề] First of all, if the tax on private cars is high, it can make the number of private cars decrease. The reason is that people will go by public transportation like buses, train, etc, so it will solve traffic jams during peak hours. Secondly, the government can use the tax to improve public transportation, such as building new train stations or replacing old buses with new electric buses to protect the environment.

On the other hand, there are some disadvantages when the government increases the tax on private cars. Firstly, the people will disagree with this policy because it will increase the cost of cars. They will have to pay more money to get the same cars. Secondly, the car industry will be affected by this policy. The number of cars will decrease, and it will affect the salaries of the workers who work in this industry. Lastly, the money from the tax is not enough to improve public transportation when the country’s economy is not good today.

It is true that television addiction has many related issues. First and foremost, it can make people waste a lot of time → get serious health diseases. To illustrate, there are some problems such as eye strain, lack of sleep, and gaining weight. Thus, people can feel tired and unhealthy. In addition, watch TV too much cause bad relationship with family. For example, when people sit in front of screen all day, they not talk to their parents or friends. For example, my brother watch TV every night, so he don’t have time to play with me (bỏ).

To solve this problem, government and family should take some actions. Firstly, parents must limits the time their children watch TV. For instance, they only let them watch one hours per day. Secondly, people need to doing more outdoor activities like playing football or go for a walk. This helps them to forget the television

In conclusion, television addiction have serious effects on health and relationship. However, people can overcome this problem if they change their habit.